Sometimes More by Deborah Hicks

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Sometimes More by Deborah Hicks

Oooh, one of my favourite kinds of fic - it pulled me immediately, I was straight away part of the rush of feeling between our lads...

...and then it got a bit... soppy? Cliched? Mills-and-Boon-ish? Outspokenly sentimental? Don't tell us - show us, just like the lads do in the eps...

And Doyle is not "the smaller half of the team" - *headdesk* I know what the author's trying to say, but... *headdesk*

But then the ending is much better, and I was all smiling again at the second part of the final sentence!

So - yeah, worth reading for those few gem-ish moments... *g*

Comments

[solosundance.livejournal.com]

oh I like short, sharp fics with blood in :) Mind you, if I was bleeding to death I'm not sure I'd want anyone raining kisses all over my face ... but then again it is Doyle's passion that pulls Bodie through.

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Yes! Me too... and me too about the raining kisses, but... then the ending. *g*

[roven75.livejournal.com]

Hmm not quite sure what to say about this, I think I've read it before but somehow it didn't leave a lasting impression...and I don't think it will this time around >< Just feels like there's something missing..
Which goes to show how spoiled I already am by all the striking short fiction abound in this fandom! Anyhow, it was solidly written, much better than I could ever hope to achieve.

I think what puts me off the most is that I can never relate to fiction where someone is badly injured and still holds what can be seen as lengthy conversation. I just can't imagine that - I mean, when you feel horrible, I think you'd just shut up for a bit heh. Which is a reason I always thought Doyle injured in DIAG was done very realistically.

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

No, I must admit it's not one of those strong-impression fics for me either - but it did have a couple of moments I liked. I thought the opening tension was well done, and I do like Cowley's recognition in that last line.

I've got to admit that when I've had an accident shock turns me into a bit of a gabbler. I tend to try and reassure everyone that I'm okay really, and find out how they are... mind you, I conked my head falling downstairs a couple of weeks ago, and when I'd gabbled out my shock a bit all I really wanted to do was go to sleep... *g* But I was always aware too that the first aiders etc fussing around would really like me to speak and show signs of life, so I did that when I caught them staring worriedly at me... On the other hand when I'm sick all I want to do is curl up and shut up and have everyone go away...

I always thought in DiaG that Doyle couldn't speak, rather than it being any kind of choice - but having just been shot I'd guess that was totally realistic, cos presumably it's more physically traumatic than even knocking seven bells out of yourself somehow...

Hmmn, just read the fic again quickly - I thought the speaking bit wasn't done too badly actually - short sentences and all that... *g* - it was more the kissing and sentiments that got to me as unlikely in that sitch... some of them seemed fair, others just a sentiment too far...

D'you think you might fancy trying a Random Rec? I'd love to read some more, even just one-sentence "this was okay"-type ones... *g*

[roven75.livejournal.com]

Thanks for sharing your thoughts on this, it's very interesting to hear how other people react when injured. I have to admit I'm only guessing here. I'm one of the lucky people who have managed so far never to get seriously injured, despite falling off trees and horses and bikes in my youth.^^
Btw, I do hope you're feeling better now! I think it's very considerate of you to keep talking to reassure others, even if it's done subconsciously. :) I think I'd just tell them to leave me alone hehe.

Oh and yes, I totally agre that Doyle in DIAG wasn't able to talk, even had he wanted to. It just struck me as very realistic, compared to scenes in other shows where people are badly injured but still have a rosy complexion and babble away. I would think especially when you're shot the blood loss and shock shuts down your system far enough to make you feel really out of it. But mind, I've never been shot (and don't intend to change that, no thanks)...

If we consider Bodie has a very high pain threshold I can see how he would still be talking, and you are right, the sentences are rather short. I can even explain the kissing to myself (at least on Doyle's part) as the unconscious need of bodily contact. Not sure Bodie would've wanted to kiss back, yeah...

Just looked at the story again, and like you said, the opening and ending are both well done. I do like it when I'm being thrown right into a story.
Goes to show, this rec thingy is a great idea, since you can discuss fic with others and reevaluate it. :) So now the story has left an impression after all!

D'you think you might fancy trying a Random Rec?
Already done! How could I resist this.... *g*

[cornishcat.livejournal.com]

Hiya!

Just out of interest, I had an accident when I was younger and subsequently was given eight pints of blood. (Obviously I didn't lose the whole lot in one go 'cos I would have been no more!!) However, despite the blood loss, I insisted on telling everyone in the emergency department about a very interesting time I'd had the night before ... oops! My poor mum apparently tried to instil some decorum by reminding me that my father was standing there and that I had better shut up before I totally embarrassed myself. *g*

So you see, it isn't unreasonable to write about accident victims holding lengthy discussions.

[roven75.livejournal.com]

Hi Cornishcat, thanks for sharing this story with me! It's fascinating to hear stories that have actually happened to people. I hope you did not totally embarrass yourself with your dad back then ;)

I guess it stands to reason that people react differently to being hurt, and I should've considered that instead of just assuming things based on my (non)experiences. I even get woozy when donating one pint of blood, and just clam up and try to hold on - I mean, wow, 8 pints of blood, even considering you didn't lose them all in one go, thankfully! I think I wouldn't have been able to say anything at all.

It's really interesting what people think about this - from now on, I will read this kind of story in a different light! :)

[cloudless-9193.livejournal.com]

I love rough moments too, but I can't really imagine Doyle in tears and kissing Bodie all over the face. :-)

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

That's just exactly the bit that went too far for me as well!