Beta Central: 'Devils on Horseback' by KWS

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Apologies for a late posting, but RL got away with me earlier in the week.

This was a DIALJ Christmas story a few years ago. As is far, far too often the case, I finished it in a rush. Someone was able to beta it for me at the last minute, thankfully. However after I got my beta's comments back I did tinker a lot - I moved whole sections around, for one thing - and have tinkered some more recently *g*.

I do tend to write very plot-heavy stories. This time, although I started out with a case and an action sequence, I was trying for something different, something more intimate. One of the things I wanted to do is portray conflict in a believable way. I find this sort of thing hard - I'm not conflict averse myself, but I'm pretty much a "come, let us reason together" kind of person. Trying to write 'difficult' emotions; misunderstandings, arguments, and people behaving illogically because they feel strongly is quite difficult for me.

So I'm mostly interested in whether the relationship parts work, although all comments are welcome - I expect there will be summat about abuse of tenses, grammar, punctuation etc. *g*


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Reading Room: 3rd Party POV "Dancing in the Rain"

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Title: Dancing in the Rain
Author: Istia (aka Nell Howell)
Link to story: Online at AO3: Dancing in the Rain
Pairing: Doyle, OC; B/D

This week’s story is Dancing in the Rain by Istia (Nell Howell)


Before we start, I would strongly suggest that if you haven’t already read this story, you do so before you jump into this discussion. There is a “surprise” in the story that I’d hate to ruin for you. You need to experience it yourself to really feel the impact.
So you’ve been warned:

( There be spoilers here! )