A Different Game by DVS
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Title: A Different Game
Author: DVS
Link to story: It's at the pros-lib site and also the Hatstand.
Originally published in: LOVERS 2 (Chained-to-the-Typewriter Press; oop.)
Permission to archive the rec/review at Palely Loitering: Yes, if wanted. :-D
Short review:
I had hopes of this. I much enjoyed The Flat by the same author and have gone back to reread it a couple of times. But this one? Not so much. Why?
(Beware story spoilers)
To start with, the writing seems jerky in places. There's a lot of 'He did this' and 'He did that'. A lack of natural flow, perhaps. A feeling not aided by the lack of contractions. It's all, 'can not' and 'did not', an affectation which I find jarring in the extreme.
But my major issue is with the end. It stops. The metaphorical mantlepiece is fair bristling with shotguns - Cowley coming to convalesce, the employment situation, the much unresolved physical relationship between Bodie and Doyle - and yet none of these story lines are played out. It's almost like the author got bored and simply stopped writing it. Most disappointing.
On the upside, if you like domestic fic, this is great. I have to admit to a fondness for it. It's almost furniture porn in places. Or maybe house porn. :-D I get much pleasure in watching the lads make a home together. I'm sad that way. Their personal relationship is also handled well. As is, IMO, their characterisation. Cowley's is a little weak. I couldn't really hear his voice as I was reading his dialogue, whereas the lads came through pretty clearly.
In summary. Cute hurt/comfort fic with a good dose of domesticity, let down by technical problems and a poorly thought out ending. I'd be interested to see what others think.
ETA Sequel, very short and not really progressing the lads storyline can be found here on pros-lib or here on the Hatstand.
*hides under the bed*
Title: A Different Game
Author: DVS
Link to story: It's at the pros-lib site and also the Hatstand.
Originally published in: LOVERS 2 (Chained-to-the-Typewriter Press; oop.)
Permission to archive the rec/review at Palely Loitering: Yes, if wanted. :-D
Short review:
I had hopes of this. I much enjoyed The Flat by the same author and have gone back to reread it a couple of times. But this one? Not so much. Why?
(Beware story spoilers)
To start with, the writing seems jerky in places. There's a lot of 'He did this' and 'He did that'. A lack of natural flow, perhaps. A feeling not aided by the lack of contractions. It's all, 'can not' and 'did not', an affectation which I find jarring in the extreme.
But my major issue is with the end. It stops. The metaphorical mantlepiece is fair bristling with shotguns - Cowley coming to convalesce, the employment situation, the much unresolved physical relationship between Bodie and Doyle - and yet none of these story lines are played out. It's almost like the author got bored and simply stopped writing it. Most disappointing.
On the upside, if you like domestic fic, this is great. I have to admit to a fondness for it. It's almost furniture porn in places. Or maybe house porn. :-D I get much pleasure in watching the lads make a home together. I'm sad that way. Their personal relationship is also handled well. As is, IMO, their characterisation. Cowley's is a little weak. I couldn't really hear his voice as I was reading his dialogue, whereas the lads came through pretty clearly.
In summary. Cute hurt/comfort fic with a good dose of domesticity, let down by technical problems and a poorly thought out ending. I'd be interested to see what others think.
ETA Sequel, very short and not really progressing the lads storyline can be found here on pros-lib or here on the Hatstand.
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Date: 2006-04-28 06:04 pm (UTC)I re-read The Flat last night though, and remembered that DVS is a good writer - I really liked that one, and there was a beginning, a middle and an end and everything!