I read the first chapter and scanned a few others. I don't think this is well written. There are a lot of grammatical mistakes, and I don't find the dialogue convincing either. Assuming the violence and rape (which are not BDSM) have some actual purpose, which isn't apparent in the first few chapters, I don't think this is even in the same UNIVERSE as TAS when it comes to good writing and a compelling story.
TAS is brilliantly written, with recurring words and images that develop deeper meanings as they reappear throughout the series, and characters and relationships that are developed with great care, and with an excellent understanding of the psychology behind their personalities, motivations, and sexual desires. The sex is never gratuitous (even the story named "Gratuitious Kink" tells us a lot about Toreth, Warrick and their relationship), and more importantly, the violence is never gratuitous. Every word, every chapter, and every scene has a purpose, and further develops the characters while it moves the story forward. It's brilliant.
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Date: 2009-04-20 10:00 pm (UTC)TAS is brilliantly written, with recurring words and images that develop deeper meanings as they reappear throughout the series, and characters and relationships that are developed with great care, and with an excellent understanding of the psychology behind their personalities, motivations, and sexual desires. The sex is never gratuitous (even the story named "Gratuitious Kink" tells us a lot about Toreth, Warrick and their relationship), and more importantly, the violence is never gratuitous. Every word, every chapter, and every scene has a purpose, and further develops the characters while it moves the story forward. It's brilliant.