Pros Novel Read-Along - Painted Angels by Angelfish - Chapter Ten

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

Hello! *g*

Painted Angels by Angelfish.
Cover art by firlefanzine

Chapter Ten
Doyle is back in Derby, with Gabe, and as the chapter opens he's staring down his old street asking Gabe "uncertainly" which house was his. A boy on a bike shouts casual homophobia at them, and Doyle stops him sharply and tells him to watch his lip "you little shit". Gabe has already been called "the usual" racist names.

Doyle remembers his house then, but when Gabe tells him his mum still lives there, decides that he doesn't want to see her again. He's visited Gabe's mum, and his father's grave (he came across the Desiderata on someone else's grave, and decided he liked it and would have it on his wall one day), and he and Gabe have gone hiking as they did when they were much younger friends. Doyle talked endlessly about Bodie The way you talk when you're falling in love, he realised.

Doyle goes back to his B&B, and to bed - only to be woken by a knocking on the door. It's Gabe - Cowley has called his mum's house, trying to get hold of Doyle. Bodie has been involved in "an incident" and he's missing, presumed dead. Doyle doesn't believe it, says he'd know "in here", as sure as Gabe knows God. Gabe helps him hire a car and gives him money so that he can get back to London fast, and just before Doyle leaves, he kisses him "mouth, open wide in silent passion" on his lips.

So... what d'you think? *g*

Comments

[macklingirl.livejournal.com]

I must admit this chapter threw me out of the story. It is like you said in you comment, I can't imagine that Doyle doesn't remember the house he lived in. And I don't like all the whimpering and weeping. The Doyle I know from the eps and from other stories is a hard Doyle with a soft core, but the Doyle we see here is a very soft Doyle with an even softer core.

Sometimes it feels as if he is schizophrenic, but then he wouldn't have made it through the police or become a CI5 agent. I don't know why the author made him so unsure of himself. I hope she didn't reflect anything of herself into Doyle.

[byslantedlight.livejournal.com]

If I think about any little part of this story too hard, then it doesn't at all seem real... jat_sapphire said she noticed a big difference in reading it fast all at once, and reading it a chapter at a time. I'm not entirely sure I like it myself! I suppose when we're not talking about it, I can just glide past alot of the problems that arise when I think about them too hard... *g*

This author often seems to traumatise the lads to a huge extent, and I'm not convinced that they could actually be in CI5 with some of the things she's done to them in stories! At least this Bodie isn't constantly having epileptic fits, and Doyle's back isn't locking up at inopportunte moments!

[shooting2kill.livejournal.com]

jat_sapphire said she noticed a big difference in reading it fast all at once, and reading it a chapter at a time. I'm not entirely sure I like it myself! I suppose when we're not talking about it, I can just glide past alot of the problems that arise when I think about them too hard... *g*

I agree. I think I'm much more forgiving or just don't notice things as much when I'm reading the whole story in one go and thirsty for the next page!