I'm finding some of the writing slightly convoluted in that it's sometimes unclear who is saying what and to whoooooom Ha - I thought it was just me! Yeah, there's been a couple of places where I've had to go back and check who said what, and a couple of times when the pov change hasn't worked as naturally as it should.
perhaps the pressure is off very slightly, Ooh, my guess is it's the exact opposite - he's feeling the pressure of being abandoned (as he probably sees it) by Cowley and Murphy ("Up until a week ago, he, Murphy and the old man would plot out these survival tests together. Now the only resource, the only team he has is this stubborn ex-copper, who beneath his friendly exterior is plainly tough as nails, and unwilling to give an inch after being ditched out on yesterday.") Oh, and now I've quoted that - maybe he's also feeling more thrown-in with Doyle, and appreciates that Doyle's actually just as competent as he is in his own way, with his own strengths and so on, so maybe he's almost been pushed into being more friendly to Doyle himself... if just because he feels like he's got no one else just now. Maybe?
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Ha - I thought it was just me! Yeah, there's been a couple of places where I've had to go back and check who said what, and a couple of times when the pov change hasn't worked as naturally as it should.
perhaps the pressure is off very slightly,
Ooh, my guess is it's the exact opposite - he's feeling the pressure of being abandoned (as he probably sees it) by Cowley and Murphy ("Up until a week ago, he, Murphy and the old man would plot out these survival tests together. Now the only resource, the only team he has is this stubborn ex-copper, who beneath his friendly exterior is plainly tough as nails, and unwilling to give an inch after being ditched out on yesterday.") Oh, and now I've quoted that - maybe he's also feeling more thrown-in with Doyle, and appreciates that Doyle's actually just as competent as he is in his own way, with his own strengths and so on, so maybe he's almost been pushed into being more friendly to Doyle himself... if just because he feels like he's got no one else just now. Maybe?