ext_110375 ([identity profile] jgraeme2007.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ci5hq 2010-02-03 06:56 pm (UTC)

It certainly would have worked better if she hadn't written it in the First person.

I agree. That kind of thing generally works better from an omniscient narrator.

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